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My husband always waits for me until I have knocked off everyday. Then we are back together on foot. Last evening, on the way to be back, I told him I would keep diary in English. He was not pleased when he heard about it. Both my husband and I don’t understand English, but I am going to learn. Get a pity, he’s not interested in English. Besides eating and sleeping, he isn’t interested in anything, but he likes cooking. On Sundays I not only wash the dishes and the clothes, but sweep the floor as well. He only cooks, sometimes he washes. My husband is fat than I, so I always laugh at him is as a pig. Everybody knows pigs like sleeping. I said to him, ’I wrote an article again. Would you see it?’ He looked my eye, then said, ’What do you wrote about me ? ’ He is always asleep on the bed and never dreams, but I can’t. Last night, I was asleep at two o’clock. I always think of things before I am asleep. I had a good dream last night. I dreamt of my little daughter. I embraced her and we were playing on the farmland together. Her lovely face was circle and red as an apple. Suddenly I felt my arm and my neck was sour and painful. I thought it must be often using the computer. To the truth, I miss my daughter too much. I would dream of her every night at all. 修改后: My husband usually waits for me until I will come home from work everyday. Then we go back together on foot. Last evening, on the way to go home, I told him I would keep diary in English. He was not pleased when he heard of this. We don’t know much English but I am going to learn. Get a pity, he’s not interested in English. Besides eating and sleeping, he isn’t interested in anything, but he likes cooking. On Sundays I do not only wash the dishes and the clothes, but also sweep the floor. He only cooks, sometimes he washes. My husband is fatter than I, so I always laugh at that he would be as a pig. Everybody knows pigs like sleeping. I said to him, ‘I wrote an article again. Would you see it?’ He looked my eyes and then said, ‘What do you wrote about me ? ’ He always falls asleep on the bed and never dreams but I can’t. Last night, I fall asleep at two o'clock. I always think about things when I am on the bed. I had a good dream last night. I dreamt of my little daughter. I embraced her and we were playing on the field together. Her lovely face was circle and red and would be as an apple. Suddenly I felt my arm and my neck was sour and painful. I thought it must be often using the computer. To the truth, I missed my daughter so much that I would dream of her every night. 本文章2006-01-13 21:40:31由autumn leaf进行编辑!! 本文章2006-02-04 11:03:10由autumn leaf进行编辑!!
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autumn leaf
thanks for your words! In fact , i am a sentimental *域名隐藏* formerly in my life there was a little frustration of my love *域名隐藏* when i recall my past,i am very *域名隐藏* i think i can win through. In a word,we can be good and work happily!
我认真看了!
醺,你的修改我认真看了!不过还没有来得及改,上篇我改了,没有贴出来.我是在想把改过后的文章再贴出来,有的不太明白,比如这句until I will come home from work everyday,要是我写的话,还是会写成until I finish to work everyday.有些错误是因为粗心,刚写了怀着受表扬和鼓励的心情,迫不及待就贴上来了,如果先写了,放一段时间,自己看看,再修改修改,可能会好点儿.不管怎样,谢谢你的鼓励,我会努力,并且会坚持下去的!
还有两个小问题,对你来说,什么时候不加定冠词the? have和have got 哪些情况下可以互换?哪些情况不能互换?
你看谁的空间呢?要看到天亮?天啦,不休息怎么行啊?长时间对着电脑,眼睛也会疼,坐得太久了,背和脖子也会疼啊,还是早些歇会儿吧.啊?
总觉得时间不够
嘿嘿,很奇怪,现在 越来越觉得时间不够. 看着看着,一 夜就过去了,天就亮了.可是我却还没把那个人的空间看完.看来要抓紧时间,少聊天,多看书才可以哦!
光看不改了哦!你?
如果说你的日记还需要修改的话,就是注意下这几个问题了.如果你能坚持,相信你一定会有收获的.
(1)不但什么,而且什么,一般不用not only, but...as well,而是用not only,but also顺带说下当跟实意动词的时候,NOT前面需要有个助动词,这里可以加个DO.
(2)比较的时候要用比较级哦. My husband is fatter than me. 这个一般来说是你的笔误了.我有些鸡蛋里挑骨头了.
(3)一个句子不能有两个动词,需要改成分句的形式. I always laugh at him that he were a pig. 因为他不是真的PIG所以你要用个虚拟语气才更贴切些哦.嘿嘿
(4)睡觉可以直接用sleep这个动词来表示,你那样写也没有错,只是asleep一般只用做表语,固定词组是fall asleep入睡,不过BE动词后面也是表语,所以说你也没错.只是我个人感觉如果只用一个单词就能表达出意思来,***就那一个单词.
(5)愿意做某事would like to do sth
(6)可以尝试写些复合句,这样可以使你的英语提高到另一个档次哦!比如说***后两句可以这样写: To the turth, I miss my daughter so much that i would like to dream her every night.
(7)同一个句子时态要一致. I embraced her and we were playing on the farmland together. ***把前后时态改用同一种,任何一种都可以,只是不能出现一个句子两种冲突的时态哦.
醺
这两天很少时间在***,文章也是在别的电脑做了,拷贝过来的。有什么事儿让你伤心了,我很担心。
贵在坚持
你比我厉害,我还总是偷懒的不坚持,这点我要向你学习. 这次的日记我好象没什么可以改的,就是有些用语感觉是chinaenglish,就是会用汉语的思维习惯类推英语的思维习惯.第二就是有些同义词的不同用法需要稍加注意.
***句话是说,你的丈夫每天都会等你下班一同回家. 没有任何的语法错误,但是,不知道为什么总是觉得有些不正宗,可能因为我自己写,也会有这样的错误,所以查找了下字典. 原来英文的习惯是这样说的. My husband always waits for me until I will come home from work everyday. Then we go back together on foot.
懂英语***用know,可以说 we don't know much English.
besides 与except 的区别是besides是有包括的除了,而except不包括的. 因为突然听说了一件伤心的事情,暂时搁浅,改天继续. 对不起.
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