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I dare not to contact you when you are working.
Though I want to show you my heart You are goddess in my heart
When I miss you
I can only walk on the small road
Eyes check the far place.
Thousands mountain and millions water can stop my step.
My heart will go on. I dare not to say I love you.
Though my heart left for you. You are goddess in my life.
When I love you
I can only stay your back
As your shadow
Feel your smile and love
Sunshine and flowers are beautiful because of your smile
Sweet and happiness permeated in my mind because of your love.
Love you all the way You are my goddess
You stole my heart
And hold in your life. 本文章2007-04-20 9:43:52由hillzeng进行编辑!!
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 Pretty
It's another pretty poem
Persuaded by you again
to enjoy your nice poem, i think you can be a person who is a lover, a public lover! dear buddy, u r no. 1
I am here
I've got a feeling here, like a spring flowing through my kraurotic heart, then permeats bit by bit...
I am here, silently...
just change as your advise
hi, amy, thanks for your kindly help.
i just change it as your advise, you are my good teacher, thanks again.
So excited!
Hi Hill. Very glad and excited to receive your prompt reply! Maybe I can have a try to change some words. I hope that can't disturbe your beatiful thoughts.
It's my great honour to change some words in your sentences as below:
I dare not to contact you when you are working.
Though I want to show you my heart
You are goddess in my heart
When I miss you
I can only walk on the small road
Eyes check the far place.
Thousands mountain and millions water can stop my step.
My heart will go on.
I dare not to say I love you.
Though my heart left for you.
You are goddess in my life.
When I love you
I can only stay your back
As your shadow
Feel your smile and love
Sunshine and flowers are beautiful because of your smile
Sweet and happiness permeated in my mind because of your love.
Love you all the way
You are my goddess
You stole my heart
And hold in your life.
Hill,你是一位有经历，充满感情的业余诗人！
诗虽然有毛病，但很通俗，写得瞒有感情的
thanks for the support
i know there have some error in this poem, but honestly i do not know how to change it, may be you can help me. please note it for me. thanks.
for this poem, i also write a poem which named christmas day, my friends say, that is like america country song. i just try, and do it, succes or not, i do not care. (:
poem
WOW!So beautiful it is!
At first I thought it's written by a famouse writer. I can feel what you want to express. But I should say there're some errors in the sentence.
Anyway, I think it's a great poem. I love that very much!
女生的感觉
尽管不是专业，却让我感动～～
只是似乎透着几许无奈？？
如果这是真实的情感，是不是你也跟我一样在经受着煎熬...？
It is dare not to contact you when you are working.
Though I want show my heart for you
......
When I miss you
I can only walk on the small road
Eyes check the far place.
......
you are right
it is not typing error, i always do not know know how to choose "thought" and "though". Thank you for your kindly help.
excellent
"thought" should be corrected to be 'though',may be typing error?
Yes, I also like "Bible". But I just have read the Chinese version.
just try
i know there have many mistake in this poem, i do not know how to change it, my words is poor thought my feeling is rich, i just try.
i believe one sentence from "Bible", which "Knock, and it will be open", if you try you can do it well.
给你加加油！
是原创，虽不是专业的英文散诗，但写出来还是很不错的，感情表达得很漂亮的，一个内剑又热情的小伙子．
还挺漂亮的,只是有些错了吧
写的挺好的, 要是我是那位女孩,一定很幸福. 不过觉得有些词用得不好吧. 甚至看不懂了. 具体哪些还不真难说. 呵呵.
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